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I meant to reply sooner, but the day kept sliding along and I never had a full minute to sit down.
I did read everything, and I think your plan makes sense if you keep it simple at the start.
I usually get stuck when I try to organize every detail before I even begin, so I started making a short list with only the next three things.
That helped more than I expected because it kept me from spiraling into distractions.
I also moved a few chores to tomorrow so I could actually finish one task without jumping around.
If you want, I can look over your outline tonight and tell you where it feels clear and where it gets a little crowded.
I am not being formal about it, just honest, because sometimes a second set of eyes catches the obvious stuff.
I think you are closer than you feel right now, and once you tighten the middle part, it will probably come together fast.
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I looked at the notes again after dinner, and I think the main issue is that everything is packed too closely together.
When I spread the pieces out and tried them in a different order, the whole thing felt easier to understand.
That is usually a sign that the idea is fine but the structure just needs a little patience.
I would start with the plainest version first, even if it feels a bit unfinished, because getting something readable on the page matters more than polishing every sentence too early.
I am around tomorrow afternoon, so send the latest version whenever you are ready.
If I do not answer immediately, I am probably away from my desk for a short stretch, not ignoring it.
I am happy to help you trim it down, smooth over the repetitive spots, and make sure nothing important gets buried near the end.
Sometimes all it takes is one careful pass.